Hi world of bloggers,
How are you all doing ? I am doing great since I am back to school. Today me and Lockhart class -(My class) Had to pick out a piece of writing that we had done. That we are happy with and we had to re check our work before publishing. Thanks to my teacher she printed out a student proofreading and editing checklist which was quite cool and was much easier to use. I choose to choose Flying 2 because I liked adjectives that I included it that piece of writing. Here is my piece of writing. Thanks Bye
Flying 2
The bird enormously flies high into the sky. Gazing with its lovely yellow, luminous, eyes at it’s target. He continues to fly. As he landed thinking it was its target he struck his head on the bulky tree branches.”OUCH!” the bird yacked. That didn’t really matter to him, what mattered to him was his prey. He bravely stood up and continued searching for its prey.
Flying confidently the bird didn’t take his eyes off his prey. He jetted to his target landing perfectly with no damage. He made his way to his raven. But what he didn’t know was that he was mistaken and had discovered something else which was plastic. His face suddenly turns as sad as a black stone underneath the sea.
He flies back up into the sky joylessly and then spots another prey but this time he made sure it was not just an old piece of junk. He asked himself “why do I keep being mistaken with an old piece of junk?” As he was flying he spotted another prey. He wasn’t gonna play around this time. He put his serious face on then he scampered over to his prey. He glared at his prey as if it was a person.
He dashed over the sky like a superhero as he kept his eyes on his prey.
As he landed where his prey was at he was assuming to find the right thing . He found his prey. As he grabbed its prey with its beck he globbed it. It was a Rodent that looked as delicious as a worm to him . He put a smirk on his face and then headed back home. It was probably the best day so far he has ever had in his life.
Gaylene